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Wednesday, June 16, 2010

Haiku Wednesday- Fathers

Teach me all you know
my son said to me one day
as I tucked him in

That won't take too long
I replied, his eager eyes
staring at my soul

I can be like you
he said, pulling up the sheet
you need higher goals

I flippantly said
and he flashed a wise smile
as the room went dark

and the door was shut
and my life flashed before me
well, he could do worse

7 comments:

  1. Wow, that was awesome! You have the perspective of writing from the Father- son point of view, it was quite lovely.

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  2. Ah, the son adores his father and vice versa. Nice.

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  3. This was truly amazing! Great writing!

    JM

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  4. That must be a great feeling!

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  5. I like your father/son interchange here.
    Reminds me of 'Teach your children well, thier father's Hell' and 'Cats in the craddle.' The latter's key line is "I'm gonna be like you dad You know I'm gonna be like you".
    ..
    I had to see the Jim Hawley, I hope I didn't steal your moniker here, 'Jim.'
    ..

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  6. i love this one! it's really nice to read this week's haiku theme from a dad's point of view.

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